Textual analysis of Th'Expense of Spirit 

This poem consists of an octave and a sestet, and it follows the Shakespearean model (3 quatrains and a couplet).
Reading the title you can expect this sonnet to be about the waste of energy due to something.
In the first quatrain the poet introduces the problem: he starts describing the horrible qualities of the lust, a feeling full of contradictions, as Shakespeare writes in the 2nd quatrain. In fact it's pursued before, but hated and despised after. This strange sensation of contrast and contradiction makes men mad.
In the final couplet the poet concludes saying that everyone knows these things but none know how to avoid this.
In this sonnet the writer uses some alliteration, in particular in the lists (expense of spirit; bloody, full of blame...) and he uses also repetitions (in action, and till action; is lust, lust...) to give more pathos to these words and to mark the brutality of the lust.
In the second quatrain the contradictory words start to appear (enjoyed, despised; haunted, hated) and continue in the next quatrain and in the couplet (bliss, woe; heaven hell...).
Shakespeare uses these words taken from opposite semanthical spheres to create a sense of uncertainty and doubt, but also to explain the contradictions of lust. Maybe the poet himself is confused and don't know how to avoid this feeling, as the last 2 lines can prove (yet none knows well, to shun the heaven that leads men to this hell).
The poet in this sonnet explains the brutality of lust, listing all its horrible qualities and its contradictions, but maybe hiself is the victim of this feeling, either he hates it.

Area di intervento: regole grammaticali
Metodo di intervento: correzione degli errori

· none know how to avoid this. -> none knows how to avoid this
· In this sonnet the writer uses some alliteration -> In this sonnet the writer uses some alliterations
· words taken from opposite semanthical spheres -> words taken from opposite semantical spheres
· the poet himself is confused and don't know -> the poet himself is confused and doesn't know
· maybe hiself is the victim of this feeling -> maybe he is himself a victim of this feeling
· either he hates it -> or else he hates it.

Metodo di intervento: rimozione degli articoli ove non sono necessari
· the lust -> lust
· the contradictory words -> contradictory words
· the victim -> victim

Area di intervento: scelte linguistiche e lessicali

Metodo di intervento: riformulazioni di frasi o espressioni inutili o inadatte.

· Reading the title you can expect this sonnet to be about the waste of energy due to something. -> Reading the title you can expect the sonnet to be about waste of energy, but there isn't any hint to the possible cause.
· In the final couplet the poet concludes saying that everyone knows these things but none know how to avoid this. -> In the final couplet the poet concludes saying that everyone knows the consequences of lust well, but none knows how to avoid them.
· he uses also repetitions to give more pathos to these words and to mark the brutality of the lust. -> he uses also repetitions to give these words more energy and to remark the brutality of lust.
· In the second quatrain the contradictory words start to appear and continue in the next quatrain and in the couplet -> In the second quatrain there are some contradictory words, which appear also in the next quatrain and in the couplet

Area di intervento: contenuto
Metodo di intervento: correzione degli errori
· This poem consists of an octave and a sestet, and it follows the Shakespearean model (3 quatrains and a couplet). -> This poem is written following the Shakespearean model, since it is composed of 3 quatrains and a couplet. [The octave and the sestet are typical of the Petrarchan sonnet]

Area di intervento: quantità delle informazioni
Modalità di intervento: aggiunta (vedi testo)

TESTO RIFORMULATO

This poem is written following the Shakespearean model, since it is composed of three quatrains and a couplet.
Reading the title you can expect the sonnet to be about waste of energy, but there isn't any hint to the possible cause.
In the first quatrain the poet introduces the problem, describing all the horrible qualities of lust, which is however a feeling full of contradictions, as Shakespeare writes in the 2nd quatrain. Indeed it's pursued before, but hated and despised after. This strange sense of contrast and contradiction makes men mad.
In the final couplet the poet concludes stating that everyone knows the consequences of lust, but none knows how to avoid them.
In this sonnet the writer uses some alliterations, in particular in the lists (expense of spirit; bloody, full of blame...) and he also uses repetitions (in action, and till action; is lust, lust...) to give these words more energy and to remark the brutality of lust.
In the second quatrain there are some contradictory words(enjoyed, despised; haunted, hated), which appear also in the next quatrain and in the couplet (bliss, woe; heaven, hell...).
Shakespeare uses these words taken from opposite semantical spheres to create a sense of uncertainty and doubt, but also to explain the contradiction hidden in lust. Maybe the poet himself is confused and doesn't know how to avoid this feeling, as the last two lines can prove (yet none knows well, to shun the heaven that leads men to this hell).
The poet in the sonnet explains the violence of lust, listing all its horrible qualities and its ambiguity, but maybe he is himself a victim of this feeling, or else he hates it.